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01 July 2013 @ 06:59 pm
Fic: A Far Better Thing (Glee, Kurt/Blaine)  
Title: A Far Better Thing
Fandom: Glee
Pairing: Kurt/Blaine
Rating: PG-13
Word count: ~25,000
Summary: AU. For as long as anyone can remember, the city has been split into two halves, Under and Over. Blaine Anderson works as a courier, delivering messages and helping people cross the border. It's a living. He makes do. And then one day, he gets a job that will turn everything upside down...
Notes: This was written with the Twine interactive fiction engine. It requires quite a bit of Javascript, so it's hosted on a separate site. It's highly recommended that you use the latest version of Firefox or Chrome to view this as it does use some more advanced CSS features. It will not work at all on IE8 or lower. I haven't yet tested it on IE9. So many thanks to zulu for the beta!

A Far Better Thing
echoalias: pic#116662666echoalias on July 2nd, 2013 11:20 am (UTC)
Oh, wow! That was so fun to read!

I'm completely taken with the set up - I've never read anything in this format before, and it totally worked to immerse me in the story. (I don’t normally go for first person perspective’s, either, but that in itself worked perfectly with the format, so I couldn’t turn away from it).

I especially liked how you set up the different "next" links, adding variety to the options - embedded within the text for flashbacks/tangents, or revealing more rolling story during the action sequences. It must have taken forever to set up, but it was quirky and kept the plot fresh (you weren't just hitting "next" again and again, and getting the same result), and related well to what was actually happening. It also helped reveal more depth to the story without bogging down the main plot, and kept the “chapters” more bite sized and easy and quick to read. I think the format really worked for such an AU story - it’s a different way of reading to describe a different world, which I think totally fits the genre, too!

Regarding the actual story, I love the concept, and I love the characterisation, and Kurt’s mesmerisation with the world of Under is both endearing along with helping introduce the world to the reader. The use of foreshadowing was really good (e.g., Blaine’s lock picking), and – although the ending was hopeful in itself – I hope there is a truer happy ending somewhere in this world!

Thanks for putting this all together :D
thedeadparrot: stop and thank youthedeadparrot on July 3rd, 2013 02:54 am (UTC)
Thanks for reading! This was such a weird, ambitious project for me, I was afraid that there wouldn't be people willing to take a chance on it.

Most of this code wasn't particularly difficult to set up. The framework itself is pretty powerful when it comes to manipulating these sorts of things, and a lot of it is just making sure you're planning everything out properly before sitting down and writing it. I was a little bit worried about the pacing in places. I'm glad it worked for you!

Re: the ending, I like the thought that there are many different ways things could go after this and that people could fill in their own future for them. Maybe one day I'll write the actual choose-your-own-adventure sequel where you can get everyone killed by making the wrong decisions.

Anyway, it was a joy to get this comment today. It's always thrilling to get thoughtful feedback on something you've made.
echoalias: pic#116662666echoalias on July 3rd, 2013 09:24 am (UTC)
"...where you can get everyone killed by making the wrong decisions."
Here's hoping the rewind button is still present for that, just in case!

But yeah, tis no problem :)
Christie: Gleesam_can_do_it on July 8th, 2013 12:22 pm (UTC)
I really enjoyed this. I was a little shaky when the notes suggested firefox or chrome. I would like to report it worked fine on IE.

Also, the 2nd person perspective thing was beautiful. The first time I heard about it I could never wrap my mind around it so I know it's more difficult to write in the 1st or 3rd like everyone else in the world does, but you did it beautifully and it definitely added to the narrative. Well done!

I have a link to the sequel saved and if I didn't have to go to work right now, I'd be diving in right now!!
thedeadparrot: friday night lightsthedeadparrot on July 9th, 2013 12:55 am (UTC)
Thanks! I don't have access to a machine with IE9 on it, so it's good to know that it's working on it.

I actually really like second person POV. When I first started working on it, I did try to write a story in another POV, but it just didn't quite work right. There's something about interactive formats that really seems to ask for second person.

And I hope you enjoy the sequel as well!
Christie: Gleesam_can_do_it on July 9th, 2013 01:52 am (UTC)
Well, you did the second person beautifully and it definitely worked with the story.

I did enjoy the sequel and read it before I left for work (don't worry, I wasn't late)